What is this? Tonal music? And not only that. There's singing too! o.O
Indeed, I did not expect this, especially not while you're still running NGAUC :D
I almost feel tempted to take out my revenge on this track. Alas, I'm too caught up composing for NGADM, and will be the entire week, and I want to review this now.
First off, I'm very glad you found this. This is very entertaining to listen to.
I really like your instrument choices. The bass is great, imo. The other instruments, like the electric guitar and organ are nice too, as are the other things that show up here and there. And I really like the melodies here, as well as the tempo changes. The percussion does its job really well. Some of the instruments could probably have higher quality though. But I actually like the way you mixed this. Apart from the vocals. They feel too dry to me.
The melody for the vocals is good too. Most of the rhythms are also fine, but at the end, they seem a bit... Flat?
Now, in my opinion, the weakest link is the singing. It sounds like to the most part, you're holding back too much. At 0:51, I'm not sure whether it's the singing or the intrument that is out of tune. But one of those two definitely is ;)
And when you sing the refrain, it sounds like you're straining a bit at the high notes. But the draw-back-ness is the thing that could use the most work, I think. Places like "whoah-oh-oh-oh-oh-oh-oh" and even part of the verses loose some of their effect because of that. The thing is, occasionally the vocals are fine. But at other parts, they're not. I'm guessing you weren't 100% secure on how to sing this piece when you recorded this?
I also think that some parts could use some raw passion when singing, especially in the refrains. Like, FULL POWER on the final refrain would be amazing :D
But yeah. I'm sure someone will come along to give you better tips when it comes to singing some time later. I can tell you didn't hit every note cleanly, so that could use some work.
Now, for the strongest part of the track. I think it's easily the lyrics! They're great!!
Really. I think they're wonderful.
Overall, this was a very enjoyable listen (or rather, listens, as this is probably my 5th one). I hope you'll do more of these!!!
Great job ;)